Describe a person who encouraged and helped you to achieve a goal
You should say:
Who this person is
What this person encouraged you to do
How this person has helped you
And explain why their encouragement helped you achieve the goal
Speaking of a person who encouraged me and helped me to achieve a goal, I am reminded of myEnglish teacher, Ms. Wang,
without whom (没有了他/她) I would never have made it to university.
Ms. Wang was an experienced, gentle and easygoing teacher in her thirties, who was well knownamong her students because her classes were never short of (从来不缺少) laughter and joy.
However, no matter how interesting the classes were, I was once a very naughty student, reluctant to(不愿意) follow teachers’ instructions and listen to classes.
Needless to say, I was among the worst students in most of the teachers’ eyes, but not in Ms. Wang’s.
During our interactions, Ms.Wang somehow discovered that I had a special interest in letters and was actually quite talented in language acquisition,
but it was my unwillingness to concentrate on studies that(强调句，正是…) prevented me from making progress.
Therefore, she began to put more attention on me, trying toencourage me by leaving positive messages on my notebook, in which she wrote:
you are better andtalented than you think you are, so please work hard and make me proud.
She also began to havesome private conversations with me after classes, encouraging me to make full use of my talent toachieve better grades.
Touched by her encouragement and kindness, I eventually found myconfidence and began to concentrate on my studies.
Thanks to her encouragement, Iwas able to discover my gift in language learning and achieve outstanding grades, enabling me toenter higher education.